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最后更新于:2023年3月7日

2023年1月2日 小记


今天叫基于OpenAI的Craft Assistance帮我润色拙荆的自述信😂

原文

Personal Statement

I would like to describe myself as a single-minded doer, always having clear goals in mind. I advocate meaningful work and prefer concise expressions rather than exaggeration and superficiality.

I have a clear understanding of my strengths and weaknesses. My courage and confidence are based on fully understanding of certain fields, while I remain humble and inquisitive about areas I have not yet explored. I believe that knowledge has no limit, and hope to further my education in finance, and become a comprehensive talent in Investment Management.

During my university years, I managed to maintain excellent academic results while actively participating in several business competitions at the same time. I also went to Beijing Normal University for exchange and have passed CFA and FRM Level I examinations. During my holiday time, I took an off-campus internship as a financial media, from which I improved my integrating skills such as efficient information collecting and learned to transform structured data programmatically.

Previously, I learned that your master’s program in Investment Management is recognized by the CFA Institute. You teach students programming skills to access a variety of financial databases, which exactly meet my interests and strengths, so I believe that your school fully satisfies my future development needs.

Been majored in finance as an undergraduate / Having a bachelor’s degree in Finance, I already have a basic technical knowledge of finance and securities markets. I also mastered using Wind Financial Terminal during my internship. Therefore, I believe that I meet your enrollment requirements as well.

Having a solid foundation in English, I am currently preparing for the IELTS test, being confident to meet your language requirements before May 2023.

结果

Personal Statement

I am an ambitious and goal-oriented individual who values quality and meaningful work over exaggeration and superficiality. I understand my own strengths and weaknesses, and have the courage and confidence to explore unfamiliar territories. I hope to further my education in finance, and become a professional in Investment Management.

During my university years, I have maintained excellent academic results while participating in multiple business competitions and engaging in an exchange program at Beijing Normal University. I have also taken CFA and FRM Level I examinations, and completed an internship in financial media to improve my data collection and processing skills.

Upon researching, I discovered that your Master’s program in Investment Management is highly reputable and certified by the CFA Institute. I am highly interested in learning programming and exploring financial databases; both of which are competencies you provide in the program and thus, I believe your school offers the resources I need to develop further.

Having obtained a Bachelor’s degree in Finance, I possess a solid foundation of technical knowledge and have experience in using Wind Financial Terminal. Furthermore, I am actively preparing for the IELTS test and am confident I meet your language requirements by May 2023.

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甚至还可以帮我减少语法错误(虽然并不太准确):

During my university years, I managed to maintain excellent academic results while actively participating in several business competitions at the same time. I also went to Beijing Normal University for exchange and has passed CFA and FRM Level I examinations. During my holiday time, I took an off-campus internship as a financial media, from which I improved my integrating skills such as efficient information collecting, and learned to transform structured data programmatically.

During my university years, I managed to maintain excellent academic results while actively participating in several business competitions simultaneously. I also went to Beijing Normal University for an exchangnd have passed CFA and FRM Level I examinations. During my holidays, I took an off-campus internship as a financial media, from which I improved my integrating skills such as efficient information collection and learned to programmatically transform structured data.

修正:将“at the same time”替换为“simultaneously”,将“has passed”替换为“have passed”,将“collecting”替换为“collection”。这些修正都是语法上的错误,“at the same time”表示两件事情发生在一起,改成“simultaneously”表示两件事情同时发生;“has passed”是现在完成时的标志,而事实上是过去完成事件,应改成“have passed”;“collecting”是动名词,而“collection”是名词,表示收集的整体。


About Craft AI Assistant


PERSONAL STATEMENT

Mingjun Liu – Finance

International Business Faculty, Beijing Normal University, Zhuhai

I would like to describe myself as a single-minded doer with clear objectives. I advocate meaningful work and prefer concise expressions over exaggeration and superficiality. I am well aware of my own strengths and weaknesses. My courage and confidence come from a thorough understanding of certain fields, while I remain humble and inquisitive about areas I have yet to explore. I believe that knowledge has no bounds, so I hope to further my education in finance and become a well-rounded investment manager.

During my college years, I passed the CFA and FRM Level I exams. I also went to Beijing Normal University for exchange and managed to maintain excellent academic results while actively participating in several business competitions. During my holiday, I took an off-campus internship as a financial reporter, which helped me develop my integrating skills, such as efficient information gathering, and inspired me to learn to transform structured data programmatically.

Previously, I learned that your master’s program in Investment Management has been recognized by the CFA Institute. You teach students programming skills to access a variety of financial databases, which exactly match my interests and strengths, so I believe that your school fully meets my demands for further education.

Having majored in finance as an undergraduate, I already have a foundational technical understanding of finance and securities markets. Currently, I am actively preparing for the IELTS test. With a solid foundation in English, I am confident that I will meet your language requirements by May 2023. During my internship, I also gained experience using the Wind Financial Terminal. Therefore, I believe that I satisfy your enrollment conditions as well.